Episode Transcript

Formatting Vertical Lists
Episode 57: May 25, 2007

Grammar Girl here.

Today's topic is how to format vertical lists.

Most of the grammar books I own only partially address vertical lists. One book discusses capitalization, another partially discusses punctuation, and so on. Only the Chicago Manual of Style gives the topic the respect it deserves and even there the information is spread out in different sections.

Experts have raised valid concerns that people overuse lists in PowerPoint presentations (1) and for presenting complex information (2),  but the scant attention to lists in most style guides has always baffled me because you can hardly open a web page, marketing brochure, or user manual without walking smack into a list. Marketing experts and web designers know that most people visually scan these kinds of simple or instructional documents instead of reading every word, and that lists improve a scanner's ability to remember key points (3, 4).

Bullets, Numbers, and Letters

If you're going to use a list, the first question to ask yourself is what kind of list you should use.

Bullets are just big dots, and you use them to make a bulleted list when the order of the items doesn't matter. For example, you could use bullets to list the items you want everyone to bring to a beach party. I wish I were in Santa Cruz right now. I'd have a party and make s'mores. Everyone would need

  • Chocolate bars
  • Graham crackers
  • Marshmallows
  • Pointy sticks


When the order isn't important, I usually list the items alphabetically or in some other way that seems to make sense. The list in the s'mores example is alphabetical, but if I called the pointy sticks something that didn't fall at the end alphabetically, I still would have grouped all the food items together and put sticks at the end. In marketing materials, you probably want to put your most important product feature or selling point first.

Numbers are reserved for instances where the items in the list need to follow a specific sequence. You could use numbers to list the step-wise tasks that are required—in order—to start up a piece of machinery, for example. To turn on my laptop

1. Open the cover
2. Push the start button
3. Make tea while the applications load

Finally, letters are useful when you're implying that readers need to choose individual items or when items don't need to follow a specific sequence, but you want to refer back to an item later. For example, GoToMyPC is a neat product:

a. Set up takes just minutes
b. Internet access is all you need to access your computer
c. They're offering a 30-day free trial

Letters make sense with that list because the order doesn't matter, and I'll refer back to item (c), the free trial, at the end of the show. You can use either capital or lowercase letters for your list. Most of the examples I've seen use lowercase letters, but I haven't been able to find a source that discusses the reasoning for choosing one or the other. Again, just make sure you are consistent.

Introductory Colons

After you've decided what kind of list to use, the next decision you're going to face is how to punctuate the statement that comes right before your list. Should you use a colon? A comma? Nothing?

If your lead-in statement is a complete sentence, then you can use a colon at the end to introduce your list.

On the other hand, if your lead-in statement is a sentence fragment, don't use a colon. It's fine to lead into a list with a sentence fragment, but most of the time, following the sentence fragment with a colon is wrong. Although there are  instances where it is acceptable (see note 1, below), they are rare and the colon is never mandatory. So, the easiest and safest thing to do is avoid putting colons after sentence fragments altogether.

A firm rule is never to put a colon after a verb in a statement that leads into a list. For example, the phrases my favorite things are and everyone should bring are sentence fragments, and should not be followed by a colon. In fact, don't put any punctuation after this kind of statement; you wouldn't put a punctuation mark there if it were just part of a regular sentence, so you don't need anything there if it is leading into a list (see note 2, below).

Capitalization

After you've completed the introductory sentence, your next question will be whether to capitalize the first letter in the statements that come after your bullets, numbers, or letters.

If your list item is a complete sentence, capitalize the first letter. If your list item isn't a complete sentence, you can choose whether or not to capitalize the first letter—it's a style issue. The only thing that is important is to be consistent. I capitalize the first letter of everything in lists because it's easier to remember “capitalize everything” than it is to remember “capitalize complete sentences and use lowercase for sentence fragments.” 

Punctuation

With capitalization covered, you're on to your items, and at the end of the first one you have to decide what kind of punctuation to use.

If your list items are complete sentences, or if at least one list item is a fragment that is immediately followed by a complete sentence, use normal terminal punctuation: a period, question mark, or exclamation point.

Web Bonus: Example

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If people came to the web site, they could
  • See the web bonus. It's an extra learning tool that was too long to put in the podcast.Sign up for the newsletter. It comes by e-mail every week or two and has a free grammar tip, links to all the transcripts for the week, and network news.
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If your list items are single words or sentence fragments, you can choose whether to use terminal punctuation. Again, what's important is to be consistent. I don't use terminal punctuation after single words or sentence fragments. I think periods look really strange after things that aren't sentences.

Finally, don't put commas or semicolons after the items, and don't put a conjunction such as and  before the last item (see note 3, below).

Parallelism

OK, now that you've got the mechanics down for lists, don't forget to be a good writer and make sure that all of your list items are parallel. That means each list item should be structured the same way. They should all be fragments or they should all be complete sentences. If you start one bullet point with a verb, then start every bullet point with a verb. Here's an example of a list that uses parallel construction:

For Aardvark, a vacation involves

  • Attending lecturesReading books
  • Seeing sights


Each bullet point is formed the same way.

On the other hand, even though the following list is grammatically correct, it's considered poor writing because the list items aren't parallel.

For Aardvark, a vacation involves

  • Attending lecturesBooks
  • Many trips to famous destinations


Again, that's an example of bad writing because the list items aren't parallel.


Notes

Much of This Comes Down to Style

A final note: Many of the points I've covered are style issues, meaning that I've run across multiple books and online style guides that make different recommendations. My recommendations are based on my assessment after checking about 20 different grammar handbooks and style guides and on what seems logical to me. For example, I didn't find any source that discussed how to order items in a bulleted list, so I made up the recommendation to write them alphabetically because it seems to be the best solution. However, if your organization has a designated style guide, be sure to check it to see if your house style differs from any of my recommendations.

That's all.

This show's book winners get a copy of The Blue Book of Grammar and Punctuation by Jane Straus. I like this book because it has clear explanations and lots of quizzes at the end. Congratulations to the winners: Nathaniel, Andrew in Colorado, and Melissa in Virginia.

If you're looking at the transcript at QuickAndDirtyTips.com, you'll see that when I referred to item (c) in the text, I enclosed the letter in parentheses. That is the proper form for referring to an item letter in a sentence. If you're referring to a number, you can enclose it in parentheses or leave it bare; it's another style issue.

Also, this week at QuickAndDirtyTips.com, Money Girl is discussing how to sell your house without paying taxes, so if you're a homeowner or thinking of investing in real estate, that would be a good
show to check out.

Finally, as always, my e-mail address is feedback@quickanddirtytips.com, and my voice-mail line is 206-338-GIRL. Thanks for listening.

References

  1. Atkinson, K. “Why BulletPoints and PowerPoints Don't Mix.” May 31, 2004. http://www.beyondbullets.com/2004/05/the_future_hist.html (accessed May 23, 2007).
  2. Tufte, E. “PowerPoint Does Rocket Science--And Better Techniques for Technical Reports.” September 6, 2005.  http://urltea.com/1eeg (accessed May 23, 2007).
  3. Ruel, L. and Paul, N. “Eyetracking Points the Way to Effective News Article Design.” USC Annenberg Online Journalism Review, March, 13, 2007.  http://www.ojr.org/ojr/stories/070312ruel/ (accessed May 23, 2007).
  4. Nielsen, J. “How Users Read on the Web.” Alertbox, October 1, 1997. http://www.useit.com/alertbox/9710a.html (accessed May 23, 2007).

Notes

  1. The Chicago Manual of Style and Punctuate It Right state that if your list is introduced by a statement that ends in namely, for example, for instance, or that is, you can use a colon if the items in the list are each complete sentences.  Yet, Grammatically Correct and The Little Penguin Handbook state that colons should never follow statements that couldn't stand on their own as complete sentences.Bill Walsh says to use a colon after sentence fragments that precede lists in his book Lapsing Into A Comma. I can find no other reference that supports his stance and cannot recommend this method. This continues to cause me great distress because he's a big-time copy editor at the Washington Post for heaven's sake! He must know what he's talking about, but all I can find are references that forbid putting colons after sentence fragments (except in unusual circumstances). And I've checked every book I own. If you work at the Washington Post, do it his way.
  2. The Chicago Manual of Style says commas are optional in some lists and allows the conjunction and after the penultimate list item if you are using semicolons at the end of each list item and closing the last item with terminal punctuation, but I find this style cumbersome.

Comments (18) for Formatting Vertical Lists |  Subscribe to Comment

mary rovaris Says:
4/29/2008 12:29:47 PM
is it appropriate to start a sentence with "First of all"? The message was in response to a doctor's messagae to me about why a report was not sent to me. "First of all" and then I recognized how busy the team is with the transitions that are happening. Thank you for clarifying this for me. I was told I should not have started the sentence off that way because it sounded negative. Mary
Kristin Says:
3/20/2008 7:33:17 PM
Karen Judd extensively covers ordered and unordered lists (in much the same fashion as you did, Grammar Girl) in her book, "Copyediting: A Practical Guide." The rest of the book is great too, if a little dry.
Aardvark Says:
7/11/2007 4:14:13 PM
Thanks for the examples. These help. Your first sentence should read as the following: As soon as you collect the money, I will deposit it. Your second and third sentence should have monies changed to money. Although moneys and monies can be used to indicate sums of money, the uses above are more common. The Amreican Heritage Dictionary has this to say about the singular and plural of the word money: "Sums of money, especially of a specified nature. Often used in the plural: state tax moneys; monies set aside for research and development. In all of aardvark's research, 98% of uses of the word money were singular. Perhaps someone out in our readership may have a better set of rules to use than old aardvark could locate. Hope this helps. -----
geri Says:
7/11/2007 1:36:22 PM
As soon as you collect the monies, I will deposit it. Any monies you spend on classroom materials can be reimbursed. I need to verify that the total of the monies in the deposit bag match the amount written on the deposit slip. -----
Aardvark Says:
7/11/2007 2:07:06 AM
aardvark always says, " This is he." -----
laurie Says:
7/11/2007 12:56:49 AM
When you answer a phone and someone asks for you should you say this is her or this is she? -----
Aardvark Says:
7/8/2007 4:53:44 PM
Please give aardvark examples of how this person is using the word monies. -----
geri Says:
7/7/2007 2:09:02 AM
Can you please explain when it would be proper to use the term monies as opposed to the word money? Dictionaries give the definition of monies as the plural to money, but I know someone that says monies regardless of whether she's talking about $1 or $1,000 or whether she's referring to cash only or cash, checks and credit card transactions combined. Her continual use of the word monies is very irritating to me, and it would help greatly to know whether she's using this term correctly or incorrectly. Thanks! -----
event marketing Says:
6/19/2007 9:26:20 PM
Hi Very interesting post, I'm going to visit your blog more often Regards, Tomma -----
Linda Says:
6/17/2007 11:35:59 PM
Have a question regarding footnotes and punctuation. The use is advertising so we don't really use a style guide, back-up is AP. Using footnote with punctuation: a comma and a period or exclamation mark, does the footnote (superscript) come first or after the punctuation. Our current example: ... per month4(superscript), you can ... ... only 8 days left!4(superscript) I believe it should be consistent and can't find any reason for it not to be. Again, the use is for printing an advertising piece. I know it's a matter of preference and I don't agree with the current usage. Thanks. -----
Gail Says:
6/2/2007 10:34:37 PM
Is "refer back" not redundant? Just curious and I love your articles! Thanks. -----
Grammar Girl Says:
5/26/2007 4:12:52 AM
Yes, it is OK to start a sentence with "however" and "and." If all goes as planned, I will cover this question in my next show. The question mark in your sentence should go outside of the quotation mark. That question was the topic of a recent newsletter. If you haven't signed up already, go to http://www.qdnow.com and sign up for the e-mail newsletter. You'll get a free grammar tip every week or two. -----
Martin Says:
5/25/2007 8:12:57 PM
I have a question about non-vertical lists . For example, say I am giving a list of reasons why people should listen to Grammar Girl. First of all, Grammar Girl rocks. Secondly, learning Grammar Girl's tips will add to your professional standing. Finally, only goofuses don't listen to Grammar Girl. My question is this: do each of those points need to carry equal weight in order to be included in such a list? If I have 3 legitimate reasons and 1 possible by unsubstantiated reason, can I include the not-so-weighty reason as one of my points? Any help from Grammar Girl or fans on this topic. I have been reading extensively on how to write well but have not encountered any information on this topic (which my supervisor insists is a hard and fast rule). Thanks -----
R. Mason Says:
5/25/2007 7:35:05 PM
I enjoyed your article thoroughly. I would like to encourage your audience to also consider the length of vertical lists. When readers need to retain information, even for a short time, the author should keep the number of list items reasonably short. Dividing a long list into subtopics can help readers greatly. Please refer to Miller’s *The Magical Number Seven, Plus or Minus Two.* Even dividing a grocery list is helpful because the shopper can more easily remember the items by looking at the produce subtopic than by scanning repeatedly through a long list to note the items related to produce. Confession: I have traveled five awkward circles within a market when using a long unordered list. -----
Bruce A Says:
5/25/2007 6:52:30 PM
The question is, however, can one begin a sentence with "However?" And for that matter (noting that I am beginning with "And") why can I begin this sentence with "And" when my elementary school teachers told me never to do so? I have one more question. In the first sentence, I stated "...sentence with 'However?'." Is it correct to include the question mark within the quotation mark? In this instance I am not quoting a full sentence or even a phrase spoken by someone else. Here, I am setting off one word. It seems like the more sensible approach would be to write "However"? rather than "However?" What say you GG? -----
Bruce A Says:
5/25/2007 6:52:30 PM
The question is, however, can one begin a sentence with "However?" And for that matter (noting that I am beginning with "And") why can I begin this sentence with "And" when my elementary school teachers told me never to do so? I have one more question. In the first sentence, I stated "...sentence with 'However?'." Is it correct to include the question mark within the quotation mark? In this instance I am not quoting a full sentence or even a phrase spoken by someone else. Here, I am setting off one word. It seems like the more sensible approach would be to write "However"? rather than "However?" What say you GG? -----
Zach Everson Says:
5/25/2007 2:51:39 PM
Good podcast! I have see a lot of documents that use numbered lists when a bulleted one would suffice. -----
Carla Says:
5/25/2007 11:29:39 AM
Hello Grammar Girl! I saw you today (25 May 2007) on Oprah (episodes air in Australia later than they do in the States), and was delighted to know about your work. I searched for you through Google, and clicked on the first link presented, which took me to “Formatting Vertical Lists”. I no longer have a copy of the Australian Government’s Style Manual, but think that it may have been the source of another type of list formatting. I recall that a list introduced with a sentence fragment can use line-end punctuation if it does not use bulleting. That's probably of little use to you without a definitive source, if it's not an American approach or if an international audience isn’t of interest.

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